• Essence_of_Meh@lemmy.world
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    2 months ago

    I get what the author’s going for but this chapter feels more like a loose idea or a first draft rather than a complete thing. Maybe it’ll flow better when you can just continue reading instead of having to wait for the next one.

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        2 months ago

        I’m not sure why this bothers me with this chapter and not with others even though most of them are pretty much the same length and have to progress just as quickly. I’ll just wait and see for now, I guess.

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          2 months ago

          Probably because this is too violent compared to the rest. Even in the beginning, she wasn’t treated badly. This is flat out bullying. The disconnect is too big.

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            Maybe? It doesn’t really feels like the right reason for me but I’m not going to say no for certain. I guess I’ll just stick to “it works better as a continuous read” for now and see how it goes.